Sleeping Beauty…Friday Fictioneers.

The dawn light shone magestically over the lake, and Diana miraculously woke up and swam to shore. Droplets of water sparkled in her hair like diamonds, but Diana didn’t look for a towel. She had to see her boys. Nothing else mattered.

“Wombat! Ginger! Mummy’s back. Here I come ready or not.”

But there was no answer, only a haunting, eerie silence, echoing like a maddening scream. Frantically, Diana searched behind every tree, but they were gone.

“Wombat? Ginger?”

Suddenly, the spiralling vortex slowed right down, almost moving frame by frame. Macabre and out of synch, Diana she’d become a character in a movie, where someone else was calling the shots. Nothing was real. She knew the lake, but was this crumbling ruin really Althorp House? It must be, but why wasn’t anyone  home?

….

This has been another contribution to Friday Fictioneers. Hosted by Rochelle Wisoff Fields and you can read the contributions Here. After reading one if the comments tonight, I’ve dramatically re-written this piece, which has taken it well over the 100 words but I was a bit spellbound by this fairytale of fairytales. Who wouldn’t want to give Diana back to her sons? Not the Diana pursued to death by the papparazzi but their Mum…Mummy!

xx Rowena

34 thoughts on “Sleeping Beauty…Friday Fictioneers.

  1. Rowena Post author

    Mummy was Diana and she’d come back to her childhood home as a ghost but a couple of hundred years too late. I was concerned that may not come across and it can be a bit of a roll of the dice whether you can convey complex scenarios in 100 words.

  2. Rowena Post author

    Thanks very much, Penny. I’d watched interviews with her boys the night before and she’d be back for sure. She couldn’t leave them.

  3. Rowena Post author

    I do have a bit of an interest in time travel and you hear people talk about: “what if all of me doesn’t come back?” So, I find these things intriguing. What if it doesn’t go according to plan and in this instance she comes back hundreds of years later.

  4. Rowena Post author

    I know I would be. I’ve had some close calls with my health and that envelope the boys had on her coffin with “Mummy” on it, has always stayed with me. I’ve kept muliple white envelopes where the kids have written Mummy on them through the years. They’re so precious to me.

  5. Kelvin M. Knight's blog

    Ah okay. Others got your complex scenario. Maybe just me? Reading over again I think it is the transition from Mummy to Diana which jars and maybe no reference points to confuse 100 year old Diana. 🙂 Not that I am telling you how to correct your story.

  6. Rowena Post author

    Hi Kelvin,
    Thank you for challenging me, because I went back and rewrote it and although it’s over the word limit, it conveys my version better. It is really a different story.
    I don’t always get every flash and some I get after reading the comments and I realize I’m reading them late at night and missing the point. However, writing is communication and it should be clear, even when it’s being clever and the reader might need to work a bit harder. I know there are writers who right so high brow that you need a spaceship to reach their lofty heights. I personally prefer something more down to earth. Human.
    xx Rowena

  7. Rowena Post author

    Hi Keith. I tried leaving a comment on your flash and I don’t think it worked. I really enjoyed it and liked how you brough smallpox into it and appreciate the info. I’ve filed that away. A great little snippet.
    xx Rowena

  8. Kelvin M. Knight's blog

    Absolutely and a flash… any story … should touch the reader emotionally and if not I would challenge if it is really a story. So glad you re-wrote and felt your story more complete now and thank you for taking my comments in such good faith. I am with you on the down to earthness. X

  9. michael1148humphris

    I expect many many authors would alter sections of their work. I would for sure. I did not see the first version, but understood this current version

  10. granonine

    Diana is imprinted on the memories of those who saw her story from start to finish, and experienced with her the descent from magical fairy tale to dismal death. You brought it all back.

  11. Rowena Post author

    I try to explain Diana to my kids and inparticular, my daughter, and nothing quite does her justice. This flash is the closest I’ve come.
    I hope you have a great week.
    xx Rowena

  12. Rowena Post author

    Thanks, Michael. I was wondering whether to post the previous one as well, as they are reasonably different stories, but have moved on. I pick up a few good ideas from my kids and my daughter told me her school hat and bag had developed “flubberitis”. This was too good to miss and I posted on that today. It can be annoying but isn’t as bad as finding the traditional squashed banana in the school bag.
    Hope you have a great week.
    xx Rowena

  13. Rowena Post author

    Thank you very much. I’d actually done a Google search to find Diana’s childhood nickname and instead found her nicknames for the boys.
    So often, the story starts to build itself. Thanks for reading and commenting.
    xx Rowena

  14. Jelli

    Oh, wow, my heart did flipflops. Such a sad story of a mother’s endearing love. a lovely tribute as well. I remember the day she was killed. I was still in pretty bad shape myself from my accident, ‘half-paralyzed drooling idiot’ is what I was. I completely lost it, wept as if she were my own mother dying. But, the example of her life gave me hope and strength to go on, to work to relearn the ‘hows’ of living, walking, being human again. I still can’t bear images of that horrid day.

  15. Lynn Love

    I know what you mean, Rowena – I have every Mother’s Day/ birthday/ Christmas card my son ever made me. Just looking at them to see how he’s developed over the years is so lovely

  16. Rowena Post author

    Jelli, I’m so sorry to read about your accident and having to start over like that. I don’t know whether you have read my About page, but I have two chronic medical conditions and have had to start over twice from those after becoming quite debilitated. I know exactly what you mean and just how grueling that is.
    I also remember where I was when Diana died and it was like being in a dream and waking up in a nightmare. I creied buckets watching her funeral on TV. The Princes also touched me in a very deep way with the envelope with “Mummy” on it, which they placed on her coffin. I keep almost all of the envelopes my kids have given me with Mummy on the front. Life is so fragile and there are times you really feel yourself fall right through the safety net and dangling by your toes and Princess Diana really seemed to know and understand that place. She had an incredible depth of compassion, borne out of suffering, which then enabled her to put herself into other people’s shoes and care.
    How are you going now? No doubt there are still “reminders”. Take care and best wishes,
    Rowena

  17. Jelli

    I am doing much better these days, thank you. I still have a ton of difficulties but I muddle through best I can. Writing and Arting have become my ‘safety nets’ from this vicious world. I live with chronic pain / cptsd that sometimes incapacitates me and keeps me indoors. Like today, it’s rainy and cold so joints ache. There are brain issues in thought processing that will never go away, just learn to live with them and hang with those who understand. My fave phrase is “don’t do for me what I can do for myself, and if I need help, I’ll ask.”

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