The Silent Type – Friday Fictioneers: 1st June, 2022.

The coast was clear. Max crept up the fire escape, through the open window into Gorjess’s bedroom. Wrapping himself in her pink sheet, he inhaled her sweet scent.

“OMG! I can’t even speak to her at school. Yet, here I am in her inner sanctum”.

“What the hell?!!” Jess screamed.

Caught in the act, Max ran. Wednesday 5.00pm…she was supposed to be at netball.

Soon, the cops turned up.

“Breaking and entering… what were you thinking?”

“Dunno,” he shrugged. “I just wanted to be near her.”

“I don’t get the next generation,” the Sergeant groaned. “Whatever happened to saying hello?”


100 words PHOTO PROMPT © Lisa Fox

This story was inspired by Chase Holfelder’s reinterpretation of The Police’s: Every Breath You Take in a minor key. I’d love to hear your thoughts. It’s so creepy!

This has been another contribution to Friday Fictioneers hosted by our intrepid leader, Rochelle Wishoff-Fields at

Best wishes,


PS Thought this photo my daughter doctored of me on the weekend might give you a laugh.

16 thoughts on “The Silent Type – Friday Fictioneers: 1st June, 2022.

  1. Rowena Post author

    Thanks, Bill. Teenagers are a great source to mine for stories. I went to a talk at the school a few years ago and they talked about what fell under the banner of “normal teenage behaviour” and there was a lot of scope.

  2. msjadeli

    The Police tune refashioned in another key does sound very creepy. That kid is a rapist in the making without intense therapy.

  3. GHLearner

    The last line was funny, but the warning signs are there so he needs a good talking to. We all are stupid as teens and not everything needs to be handled like a crime though.

  4. Rowena Post author

    Thankfully, it was fiction, but not too far fetched probably. I didn’t think of him being sinister, but possibly in his own world and having trouble connecting and had no intention of getting caught there.
    I need to write something light-hearted and funny this week. Just polished off a fairly heavy short-story for a competition.
    Hope you’ve had a good weekend.
    Best wishes,

  5. Rowena Post author

    I’ll mention that in my next meeting at the school. Last week, I went to a talk about vaping. I felt so out of it. So much for being up to date on what’s going on, not that I want to take that up.
    Humph! Speaking of dubious behaviour. I glanced over at my husband’s chair and noticed a naughty dog sitting in it. They’re not allowed on the lounges. e’s even got a good red cushion to snuggle up to. Hope I can catch a photo before she moves. Villains are great subject matter.
    Best wishes,

  6. Margaret

    Poor lad.He needs help for sure. I think we all do at that age, as you suggest in your comments. That ladder and those windows just beg for peepy/creepy stories. Well told.

  7. Rowena Post author

    Thanks, Margaret. Yes, I’ll blame the photo prompt too. I’m sure it led him astray with that tempting staircase.

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